July 2

100 word challenge- this week we are writing 100 word stories in response to some cool visual images. Here is the first.

It dragged its giant claws along the floor. Ugly gnarled fingers searched for purchase on the polished timber. The beast roared again, blood curdling sound echoing from the cavernous depths below.. The girl sat still as a stone, It wouldn’t be long now- hold on.  She hoped the portal would close in time. Once more the beast surged. Its voice was joined by the screams of the other broken souls in the abyss. She hugged the bear tighter. It didn’t struggle. It knew that all was lost. The girl stared blankly into its tear filled eyes. “I’m your mummy now”.


Posted July 2, 2017 by brownstuff in category Uncategorized

30 thoughts on “100 word challenge- this week we are writing 100 word stories in response to some cool visual images. Here is the first.

  1. dylanjones17

    Hi I am Dylan from O.I.S. I love the description used in this piece of writing. I’t really made me feel worried about the girl.

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Hi Dylan. In this story the little girl is actually the evil one. She has stolen the monsters baby (the bear). Have another read and see if it makes sense.

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  2. Waiheke

    Hi my Name is Waiheke from Kawakawa primary . I love the description used in this piece of writing. I’t really made me feel worried about the girl.

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Hi Waiheke. In this story the little girl is actually the evil one. She has stolen the monsters baby (the bear). Have another read and see if it makes sense.

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  3. Awatea

    Hi my name is Awatea I go to Kawakawa primary. I like how you used a effective adjective in your piece off writing. I hooked me into your writing and wanted to read more. Nice work.

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Thanks Awatea, what a nice comment to get! Did you get that the little girl is really the evil one? She has stolen the monster’s baby (the bear). I don’t think many people got that so maybe I didn’t write it too well after all.

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  4. Ebony

    Hello Papakaio my name is Ebony I go to Kawakawa primary school I liked the image that you used and the description. What was the hardest part?

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Hi Ebony the hardest part was only being able to use 100 words. It makes it so that you have to be really precise. Its such a cool challenge.

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  5. Tia

    Hi room 6 my name is Tia I’m a year 8 from Kawakawa Primary School room Nga Rau Puawai. I really like your guys 100 word challenge story. I like that you guys used describing words to describe parts of this story. Was it challenging to do this 100 word story?

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Hi Tia, the hardest part was only being able to use 100 words. It makes it so that you have to be really precise. Its such a cool challenge.

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  6. Tamarah

    Kia ora rm 6 my name is Tamarah from Kawakawa Primary I enjoyed the 100 word challenge. I also liked the descriptive words that you used. What was the difficult part of the Writing?

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Hi Tamarah, the hardest part was only being able to use 100 words. It makes it so that you have to be really precise. Its such a cool challenge though.

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  7. samk17

    hi my name is SAM from OIS. I love the description used in this piece of writing. It made me feel worried about the girl.

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    1. brownstuff (Post author)

      Thanks Sam, what a nice comment to get! Did you get that the little girl is really the evil one? She has stolen the monster’s baby (the bear). I don’t think many people got that so maybe I didn’t write it too well after all.

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  8. arrowk17

    Hello, I’m Arrow from O.I.S and reading it the first time I thought the ‘monster’ was evil but now I get that the girl is truly the mean one. The finishing sentence is really good and is a real cliff-hanger. What I think would be really cool is if you did a sequel for this piece of writing.

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