July
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100 word challenge- this week we are writing 100 word stories in response to some cool visual images. Here is the first.
It dragged its giant claws along the floor. Ugly gnarled fingers searched for purchase on the polished timber. The beast roared again, blood curdling sound echoing from the cavernous depths below.. The girl sat still as a stone, It wouldn’t be long now- hold on. She hoped the portal would close in time. Once more the beast surged. Its voice was joined by the screams of the other broken souls in the abyss. She hugged the bear tighter. It didn’t struggle. It knew that all was lost. The girl stared blankly into its tear filled eyes. “I’m your mummy now”.
Hi I am Dylan from O.I.S. I love the description used in this piece of writing. I’t really made me feel worried about the girl.
Hi Dylan. In this story the little girl is actually the evil one. She has stolen the monsters baby (the bear). Have another read and see if it makes sense.
Hi my Name is Waiheke from Kawakawa primary . I love the description used in this piece of writing. I’t really made me feel worried about the girl.
Hi Waiheke. In this story the little girl is actually the evil one. She has stolen the monsters baby (the bear). Have another read and see if it makes sense.
Hi my name is Awatea I go to Kawakawa primary. I like how you used a effective adjective in your piece off writing. I hooked me into your writing and wanted to read more. Nice work.
Thanks Awatea, what a nice comment to get! Did you get that the little girl is really the evil one? She has stolen the monster’s baby (the bear). I don’t think many people got that so maybe I didn’t write it too well after all.
Hello Papakaio my name is Ebony I go to Kawakawa primary school I liked the image that you used and the description. What was the hardest part?
Hi Ebony the hardest part was only being able to use 100 words. It makes it so that you have to be really precise. Its such a cool challenge.
Hi room 6 my name is Tia I’m a year 8 from Kawakawa Primary School room Nga Rau Puawai. I really like your guys 100 word challenge story. I like that you guys used describing words to describe parts of this story. Was it challenging to do this 100 word story?
Hi Tia, the hardest part was only being able to use 100 words. It makes it so that you have to be really precise. Its such a cool challenge.
Kia ora rm 6 my name is Tamarah from Kawakawa Primary I enjoyed the 100 word challenge. I also liked the descriptive words that you used. What was the difficult part of the Writing?
Hi Tamarah, the hardest part was only being able to use 100 words. It makes it so that you have to be really precise. Its such a cool challenge though.
Hi my name is Honekai from kawakawa primary school i really like your 100 word
hi my name is SAM from OIS. I love the description used in this piece of writing. It made me feel worried about the girl.
Thanks Sam, what a nice comment to get! Did you get that the little girl is really the evil one? She has stolen the monster’s baby (the bear). I don’t think many people got that so maybe I didn’t write it too well after all.
Lovely!
hi im jack from ois and really like the puncotion and discription
Hello, I’m Arrow from O.I.S and reading it the first time I thought the ‘monster’ was evil but now I get that the girl is truly the mean one. The finishing sentence is really good and is a real cliff-hanger. What I think would be really cool is if you did a sequel for this piece of writing.
I like the description used in this piece of writing. it made me feel worried.
Sam, were you worried for the girl? Or for the bear?
Hi I’m Jarod from Oamaru intermediate shivers shot up my spine. You used discriptive language.
Thanks Jarod. It’s good to get feedback on how the reader reacts to your work.
Hi I’m Ben from O.I.S what a good piece of writing
Thanks Ben! Do you like to write? What is your favourite style to write in?
AHHHHHHHHHHH thats scary
COOL it’s really cool
Thanks Jake! Do you like to write? What is your favourite style to write in?
Hi Im Chloe from Oamaru intermediate School what a great piece of writing !!
Thanks Chloe! Do you like to write? What is your favourite style to write in?
What an awesome piece of writing! Well done.